A flag can be all colors
All patterns and sizes too.
So what is the importance
Of colors red white and blue?
Red stripes stand for courage and
For sacrifice people made,
Showing the bloodshed in war
Maybe from a single blade.
White represents our peace
And kindness shown throughout
America, the beautiful.
It’s great without a doubt.
Blue shows the freedom which was
Fought for all the way through.
I'm proud of American
Colors Red, white, and blue.
This is a nice, clean poem. The closed form works well, but I would recommend paying closer attention to cadence by counting syllables per line so that you can establish a patter there. If you count the syllables per line in this poem, I think you'll see you don't have an established pattern. The topic is excellent for Veteran's Day, and the sounds are also good.
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ReplyDeleteI really liked the change you made in the last part from what it was when you showed it to me, it flows much better now.
-Karen
Tnis is an excellent poem! I really like how only some of the words rhymed; that way it doesn't sound fake. Also, I like the way you talk about each color, and explained what it represents. There is nothing I would change about this poem.
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